My thoughts on Honda Fan's edits:
First part:
On 9/12/20 I drove down Townhouse Road and W Gardiner. My Dodge Neon began to speed out of control after I’d let off the accelerator. I didn’t know what was wrong with the car at this time; I slammed on the brakes attempting to stop the car. A Police Officer saw me from the other side of Townhouse Road and West Gardiner road. The officer turned on his lights momentarily to get me to pull over. Due to the nature of this emergency, I had already begun to pull over before the officer activated his light-bar. The officer asked for my Driver’s License and registration. I told him that I believed something was wrong with the car, as I rarely drove it and handed my License and Insurance Card to him. Admittedly, I was upset during the traffic stop because I was concerned about my wellbeing with the car’s alarming behavior. The officer went back to his car and then cited me with an unfair fine of $278. I reiterate that at this time, I did not know what was wrong with my vehicle. I had the car towed to my mechanic’s garage, Gregory LaClaire, who is ASE certified with 34 years of experience. After some troubleshooting, Gregory LaClaire found the problem – a frayed throttle cable.
My recommendations:
First sentence - 9/12/20? So, this hasn't happened yet???? I think you mean 9/12/19.
What direction were you traveling and on which road? Were you traveling South on Townhouse Rd and passing the intersection on W Gardiner? Or, East on W. Gardiner and passing the intersection with Townhouse Rd? Be specific to build the picture for the judge of where you were.
In this paragraph, you state that the MSP officer asked for license and registration; however, you handed him licence and insurance. Recommend providing clarification on the inconsistency or that you handed him license, registration, and insurance card (or something to that effect).
Was there any dialogue between you and the MSP officer? You mentioned that you told him something was wrong with the car, did he respond to your statement (if so, do you remember what was said)?
Don't state the fine was "unfair" as that is conjecture; you were cited $278 (statement of fact). You believed this to be unfair (statement of opinion).
I would change the sentence, "I had the car towed to my mechanic's garage...." to start something like, "Upon concluding my business with the MSP Officer, I immediately called a wrecker and had my car towed to my mechanic's garage..." This is to shape the sequence of events for the judge.
I would change the sentence, "After some troubleshooting, Gregory Laclaire found the problem - a frayed throttle cable." to something in the effect of, "On DD Mmm YYYY, Gegory LaClaire was able to complete his diagnostic of my car's malfunction, a frayed throttle cable was preventing the throttle plate from shutting when lifting my foot from the accelerator/gas pedal (the throttle would stick open); this caused the car to accelerate without any input from the driver and was the source of my over-speed condition on 9/12/19. Repairs were completed on 10/3/19 when I retrieved my vehicle." Do not assume the judge is mechanically inclined; it has to be clear what the cause and effect is (say what happened and what it means); you do this in the part below much better, maybe take some of the language below and add it to the original statement.
In this part:
Exhibit A. I received a
new throttle cable from Modern Performance online on 9/23/19 and paid for it with a credit card, $73.
Exhibit B. I paid Greg LeClair $165 for a total of $238.
Exhibit C. I also took a photo of the frayed throttle cable in the car before it was repaired by Greg. I contested the speeding ticket because according to the evidence given, this was a case of car trouble and not an issue of recklessness on my part.
I took a AAA defensive driving course to sharpen my driving skills and got a certificate of completion on 9/28/19.
I went to court on Feb 14, 2020. The hearing started with the officer under oath saying he cited me at 68mph on radar. The officer then stepped down. I took the stand. I stated that my frayed throttle cable caused the car’s throttle to stay open, resulting in the car speeding out of my control. I also noted the speeding Fine of $278 seemed excessive for a car defect, especially one that I’d happened upon unknowingly. I’d maintained my car rigorously, and tended to fix things that came up right away.
I then gave the judge four Exhibits to support my case.
Exhibit A. Bill dated 9/23/19 from Modern Performance online with my name and address on it and credit card receipt For a New OEM throttle cable
Exhibit B. dated 10/3/19 repair bill from Greg LeClair auto repair for $165 with His Business Card and telephone numbers including cell phone.
Exhibit C. Photo copy dated 10/3/19 of the Frayed throttle cable before the repair.
Exhibit D. My completed AAA Defensive Driving Certificate.
Please consider my Evidence in Exhibits A, B, C, as I believe the judge did not review them at all.
At the end, you ask the appeals judge to consider Exhibits A, B, and C but not D? Any reason why?
Also, there are inconsistencies with Greg LaClaire's name; Gregory to Greg is probably no big deal; however, at the beginning you spell his last name as LaClaire and at the end it is spelled LeClaire; be consistent (and correct).
I recommend getting rid of any contractions; from my experience with professional writing, try not to use contractions. Don't should be do not; I'd can be read as I had (some may read this differently). Then, you get into the statement, "...one that I'd happened..." what does that truly say, "...one that I had happened..." sounds/reads very unprofessional (this is why removing contractions is important, it takes the slang or misinterpretation out of the document). I would make this change throughout the document to improve the tone of it as a whole.
Also, if your mechanic can't be present to testify, you could always ask for a signed and notarized statement from him as admissible evidence in court (if he is willing to provide one, he may not be). Maybe add this as Exhibit E?
Bare in Mind I left out the swear words and some thing s not in my favor, Censored version LOL. And the Doc didn't come up right mS note 
word. I am using MS online-doesn't cost anything.
Oh it was also written very plainly on purpose, I don't want to confuse the Judges limited fat minds. I haven't finished yet either another full page might be all I need. In Maine we have a bill going to be voted on about Forcing vaccinating Kids 0n anything the pharm companies think kids should have. I know a lot about vaccine's for cats some are good and some cause a lot of harm and are untested. They treat people like cats except for me I chose what to vaccinate them for not some vet that just wants to cheat me out of money and make my cat die. Cats rule! That another topic I am going to write about. This is a new law by idiots and paid off politicians, the same one's writing one stupid law req on cars like seat belts and cell phone bans onto all kinds of stuff cops can give tickets for stealing money from poor people.
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and growing. I think Ca is around a $100 fine for every driver maybe more.
My exhibit C pic is a solid piece of evidence-showing faulty accelerator cable in Car.
not $175 for a appeal, but does close to the same thing. Just another way for these creeps to steal more money. A article on the front page in the newspaper put out news how the MSP threw a bus driver in jail charging this poor bus driver with all kinds of things even drunk driving-he had zero booze when tested. The charges where thrown out but not before he sat in jail with a $500 bail bond. I actually spoke to him and told him to sue -I know I would, but he wasn't interested-just a kind old bus driver for 35yrs of public service.
